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Shall we enter our own world tonight?
Dance, dance into a world of sunlight and moonlight?

Will you take my hand if I ask?
Will you stay stand by me?
What will be will be

So will you dance with me?
Make me get lost in your beautiful eyes?

Will we enter while the stars shine bright?
Ready to go if you are there’s no right or wrong answer
Maybe if not today we’ll go on another night

So will you come with me tonight?
Or shall I go on another night?
©2007-2009 ~thy-sun-himeko
:iconthy-sun-himeko:

Author's Comments

Just something I ended up wirting I worte more but then I thought it was better as two peoms but different verisons. Soo expect to see another dancing one lol

Its not the best in the world but enjoy :)

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:iconkareginomoto:
lovely :rose:

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:rose:“even the most beautiful flower can grow in hell”:rose:

make me happy , you'll be happy - make me mad and you're going to DIE !

愛してる =Kaoxita :blushes: :heart:
:iconthy-sun-himeko:
Thank you. And thank you for the fav :)

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At heart we're all self seeking and selfish Hearts are full of so much hate yet so much love to... Soiciety is what holds us together...
:iconkareginomoto:
your welcome.

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:rose:“even the most beautiful flower can grow in hell”:rose:

make me happy , you'll be happy - make me mad and you're going to DIE !

愛してる =Kaoxita :blushes: :heart:
:icontombec:
Very nice indeed. Kinda reminds me a little of two different poems of mine, combined. :thumbsup:
:iconthy-sun-himeko:
Thanks! ^^

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At heart we're all self seeking and selfish Hearts are full of so much hate yet so much love to... Soiciety is what holds us together...
:icondrkelement:
The idea is very nice, but I must admit that I don't like the repetition of night/tonight. I only like repetition of words in consecutive stanzas if the meaning of the word is changing from stanza to stanza. I would probably fix that by turning night in to a metaphor if I was writing a poem like this.

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"As you build your dreams on my shattered hopes
I'll look back on a day once loved and fantasize for tragedy"- Alesana
:iconlexafar:
OMG i think i'm gonna cry :tears:

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Feel free to take a look to my gallery and help me spread my love for Kovu all over the DA :heart:[link]:heart:

Oh! how the world, seems so unfair, creating a love that cannot be shared-"Melissa Etheridge"

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